My Query Letter Part 2...

After listening to your advice, I decided to give it another try. I know many of you said you liked the first query letter I drafted. However, a few made suggestions that I thought were very good. In view of the suggestions made, I put together this new query. Please go over it and see if there is anything I've missed. I want to know which you think is better the first one or this new draft. The details I mentioned in the previous query will be in the synopsis which I will share once I nail down the query. So here goes:

Birth…

These are my four grandchildren. Jaiden is ten days old now and I'm a happy grandfather again.

I found there is nothing more mysterious than the birth of a child. Let me explain to you why this is such a baffling event to me. First of all, I see the human body as a machine. Just like a car it can be moved, and directed to accomplish our needs. Our eyes are the windows to the outside world. We live inside moving the machine at will. Like any other machine, it starts out shiny and new, but with time it will slowly deteriorate. When the machine ceases to function, we leave. This is the only way we can function in this material world of energy and atoms.

Beauty...

Things of beauty stir every emotion inside of us. A painting can be beautiful, a flower, a song, a meal, even a lover's touch. You see beauty engages all your senses. Your sense will bring your emotions with them as a friend. To believe that beauty is only in the eye of the beholder is to limit the experience of a life changing event.

A sample of my query letter...

Sorry but blogger has done it again. It seems I can't attach a picture to my blog now. No matter life goes on. Today I wanted to let you see my query letter in the hopes that you will assist me by giving my your critique. This will be a great help for me in putting my best foot forward. In my last blog I had everyone vote as to the title of the book. I listened and changed everything accordingly. Please let me know what you think.

An idea for a new name...

I have thought of another possible name for my book and decided to ask you guys what you think of it. In order to emphasize the title, I needed to justify it and change the synopsis. This is not a complete synopsis just a quick idea for one, but you get the general idea. So, here goes, tell me what you think.

Super 8 On -- Father's Day

The movie has a few funny moments. You have to love a kid who wants to blow everything up. I'm just glad he doesn't live in my neighborhood. Every now and then, we all make mistakes and its hard finding your way back home again. How to deal with the situation at hand is what this movie is all about.

The name of my book is...

I am so sorry that I've been out of commission for a couple of days here. I've been working on interviews for regular employment, and desperately trying to finish editing my book before I become employed. I'm not sure if any of you have been in my situation, but it gets too much to keep up with at times like these. If you commiserate let me know your situation, and we can compare notes, maybe help each other out.

Super 8

If you haven't heard yet, Super 8, written ad directed by J.J. Abrams and produced by Steven Spielberg is coming out this week. Being a huge Sci-Fi thriller fan I decided to get all over it. The movie is not out, and it's already stirring up a bit of controversy. Some people are criticizing it for its ads,

Interview with Michelle Brooks

Bone Dressing

By: Michelle Brooks

Time is running out… the dark that’s been chasing Syd for many lifetimes has finally caught up with her…

Book Review of Bridges...

BRIDGES

A local restaurant in my home town has pictures on the wall from when the tobacco industry first came to Florida. I look at these pictures and wonder what life was like in those days. I walked into a shop a couple of months ago to drop off two treadmill motors for repair. On the walls, they had pictures from when they first opened shop, which was in the 40's. There were women in dresses and men with nice shirts repairing small motors on their benches. When they took us to the back the scene was completely different from what I saw in the pictures in the front office.

What I'm working on now...

Please excuse the long breaks in my blog. I am attempting to finish my book and blogging as well as Twittering consumes much of my time. You guys are awesome and I love you all for following.

Let me give you a small synopsis of what my book is about. I also want to get your opinion on the name. Let's start with the synopsis: